Book 1, "Will?"

It seems like we have come across my first poem. I don't think it's very good, but I'm not sure judging it is wholly fair in this case. It's written a little oddly, in addition to me being quite the youngster when I wrote it. I guess I found out in the process of writing this one that it's difficult to come up with proper adjectives to describe things. Language is not perfect, and I feel like this was me exploring that imperfection.

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               will?

Soaring clouds spacle the skies

Floating           explore

                       travel

Rolling waves cross the ocean

                      tumble across

                      search

Suspended stars watch over the universe

                          watch

                          wait out

                          Brighten

Chilling winds cool the deserts

                      chill

Falling snow decorates the lands

                    adorns

                    ornaments

Wilting leaves conceal the soil

                      overlay

                      shroud

                      enshroud

life granting light Bakes the surface

                         nits           earth

          Pours down upon     planet

                         Illuminates

Violent Hurricanes tear through the terrain

Active volcanoes spawn new coming islands

Biting hail pelts the life within

Revitalizing rain Heals this hurt ground

                                        scarred

Concealing Fog casts questions upon on known lesser known facts

Dark night competes with light day

And Humans live

                     exist

                     love

                     think

                     ponder

                     Hope

                     wish

                     change

                  >die

                     Kill

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So yeah, a little odd. I do like the way that I used a bunch of adjectives to vie for the same spot in the poem although I wish I had used better adjectives. I feel like this had potential, namely because of how much I liked the ending, but I feel it was hurt with the generic feel that the descriptions of nature had. Maybe I'm crazy and it's just because I wrote it that I'm not pleased with it, but it definitely looks broken. That's for sure.